Jasmine Hart

Where do Abigail and Julian need to bring the doctor to? They left before Isabelle decided that Elizabeth should stay with them...

Lol. This is really great. The form was perfect, and this is just pure brilliance. I wish I could say something a bit more helpful but I really can't fault ...

I really liked this! Your imagery is great, and I love how it flows. I love the second last line, and the first half of the last line, but I'm ...

I do like this, but agree with blackstorm and Fangala. The imagery is lovely, and you've expressed yourself well. I might suggest tweaking the third line by just admitting the ...

Once there was a monster who spoke only about bubble gum. He thought that he should take a lesson about bubbles and rubber bands. He could jump over the river ...

I don't really mind it getting dark early in the evenings, but I do mind the dark mornings! It was already hard enough to get up what with the cold ...

Once there was a monster who spoke only about bubble gum. He thought that he should take a lesson about bubbles and rubber bands. He could jump over the river ...

Hey Kelsey, Welcome! Hope you like it here. Jas

This was really great, and the flow was fantastic. The rhyming scheme is handled really well throughout, and made it very easy to read. I think I'd change the second ...

I really liked this. I love how the repetition suggests weariness, and the internal rhyme which you have in certain lines is really great. (E.g "I'm lost and I'm lonely, ...

It's a nice piece, but I'm not sure about the first line. It reads a little strangely I think. Maybe try "As for writing this down." I'd omit "absolutely", as ...

I'd like to do this if my concentration comes back, and if I can stop wrinkling my nose up at the pieces I've written/started to write recently...

Oh no. This looks like it may require logic. 1)Life jacket. Em, this seems like it may be a good idea...though I wish I'd put it on beofre my boat ...

The rose turned yellow, then wore a grey fur To keep her warm against condensation Which worked from her source to try to woo her But merely murdered their shared ...

I'm open minded. But I'm not too big on complicated fanatsy things. I don't read fantasy, so I need it to be straight-forward enough that I can bluff.